Friday, May 18, 2012

Autumn


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Autumn
by Stefan

The beige leaves swirl and dance as

they fall to the ground.

The balanced temperature is warm and

       with one flick he changes your feelings.

The cool wind blows until he’s blue

he throws the dust and

leaves everywhere.

The native birds fly south so they’re
ready for winter
they make formations on the way.

Autumn is tired she has had a long season
time to sleep Autumn is over.

WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)
4/4
Made the nouns do something
3/4
Started each new description on a new line
3/4
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
4/4

1 comment:

  1. Cool Stefan!
    I like your poem and your Fotobabble. My favroite part was 'Autumn is tired she has had a long season time to sleep Autumn is over.' because it has a lot of speech and adjectives.

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